1) 8/10 It quite literally fit the prompt, which is great but not entirely unique. Like I love the idea you have here! 2) 7/10 The story seems to be disjointed and a bit puzzling I think, especially towards the end? I was very confused in like the last quarter of the story. I love this world you've built though and I NEED MORE OF IT! Outerspace is so fun to play around in and the ideas you've got going here are so incredibly creative! 3)8/10 I enjoyed the story, and I'm so curious as to Kurogane and Fai's pasts and such, I just think it's in need of some work. Which I'm sure you'll totally be able to put into the work once life becomes less crazy and y'know the Olympics aren't hanging over you! :)
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It quite literally fit the prompt, which is great but not entirely unique. Like I love the idea you have here!
2) 7/10
The story seems to be disjointed and a bit puzzling I think, especially towards the end? I was very confused in like the last quarter of the story. I love this world you've built though and I NEED MORE OF IT! Outerspace is so fun to play around in and the ideas you've got going here are so incredibly creative!
3)8/10
I enjoyed the story, and I'm so curious as to Kurogane and Fai's pasts and such, I just think it's in need of some work. Which I'm sure you'll totally be able to put into the work once life becomes less crazy and y'know the Olympics aren't hanging over you! :)