kurofai | [Team God] (Ya’aburnee) Godblood and Dragonheart

Title: Godblood and Dragonheart
Prompt: Ya’aburnee (Arabic): a declaration of one’s hope that they’ll die before another person because of how unbearable it would be to live without them.
Rating: Explicit / R18
Tags: Not Safe For Newbies/Nick. Graphic violence; themes of self-sacrifice; self-inflicted injury; graphic depiction of wounds. Major character death; references to war; canon-typical angst; loss of life; references to death and the afterlife.

A masterless knight seeking to aid a healer on a dangerous quest in a distant land finds an oath of his own — in the heart of a man whose past lies in ruins.

~the end.

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1. How in-character was this fic? (1-10)
2. How well did this fic handle the prompt? (1-10)
3. How well did this fic fit their team’s theme? (1-10)
4. How much did you enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
5. Was the fic tagged correctly (Yes or No)

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I was really looking forward to this fic and it's just been wonderful!! Even if you didn't have the time to write everything you wanted to it still ended up as a great, fulfilling fic that stands very well in its own. I loved the tragic past role reversal, it was really interesting to see how the dynamics changed. The interactions with Sakura were sooo adorable and heart-warming, and then the flashback with Kurogane's mother left me utterly speechless. It was so raw and impactful and well-written, just an incredible segment.

Also, Kurogane's battle horniness us always nice to see, and for some strange reason stories where gods are killed just appeal to me so much, so the fic catered to me inmensely :') Great work!!

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Hoooooly crap I'm honestly blown away by how well-written this is like. Clover, I'm used to you making masterpieces but this took me by the hand, jumped us off a cliff, and then caught me on the ground. Holy crap. I think I'm in shock???

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In-character and fit the prompt exactly!

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As an Arabic speaker, I had a bit of a hard time reconciling the prompt with Kurogane's mother's actions as Yu'burni is normally used in a romantic sense or given as a grand compliment rather than an act of actual self sacrifice; this is me being anal and I'm sorry! That aside, this was a wonderful read! The descriptions were lush and detailed as could be and I especially enjoyed the role reversal between Fai and Kurogane.

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Ahhhh, thank you so much???? Honestly, what do I even say to such a lovely comment!

It was a little bit surprising how big this fic turned out to be, but I suppose I only have myself to blame for that, haha. Still, I'm really happy you enjoyed it as much as you did, and that my attempt at a role-reversal of sorts worked well! I really enjoy playing with Kurogane and Fai's dynamics, so this was a great exercise for that.

Sakura was really interesting to write too, as she drove the plot despite being a supporting character, and also I love the idea of her being on her own quest and the people she meets following her - I suppose I gave her the role Syaoran technically fills in TRC!

Honestly, Kurogane's mother is a character that fascinates me, so I was really happy I could write her as powerful and dynamic - as soon as I heard the prompt I felt that she was part of it, so I'm stoked I got the chance to include her in such a meaningful way - and much the same for Elda, too!

Pfft, Kurogane's "battle horniness" is such a huge part of his character, lmao, I couldn't leave it out! Ahaha if anyone could fight a god into submission through sheer willpower, it would be Kuro-tan, that's for sure!

Thank you SO MUCH for reading, and for your vote!!

If we're gonna fall, let's fall together!! Ahhh, that was such an amazing compliment, I'm red all the way up to my ears! I'm so, so happy you enjoyed it so much, and if you're shaken from reading it, I'm shaken from this comment!

Thank you so much for reading, and for your vote!!

Ahhh, thank you so much!! I'm really happy you thought the characterisation was good, and you enjoyed my take on the prompt!

Thank you so much for reading, and for your vote!!

Haha, no worries! I can absolutely see how you'd have a little trouble with my interpretation of the prompt seeing as you speak Arabic - but that's the best thing about prompts, they can be interpreted in many different ways. And even if where I went with the prompt was not where you expected, I'm still glad you enjoyed reading, and my attempt at a role-reversal!

Thank you so much for reading, and for your vote!!

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Of course you handled all the characters perfectly, I enjoyed everyone that you managed to squeeze in there- great job.
I enjoyed how you handled the prompt- completely unexpected. Like wow She Did That TM. And, yep, nailed the theme, there was most definitely a god in there.
I loved this world you created- really not fair there isn't more. I want to know more about Sakura's and Fai's travels up to this point and then I want more with Kurogane being the new companion bc, like, we all know he is gonna tag along. Fai's gift is super interesting and i want to know more about Kurogane's now that these events have unfolded.
That being said- I didn't really get the 'Kurofai' vibes yet from this fic- yeah Kuro got like a battle-boner but I would have like more in the ways of actual romance blossoming between the main 2.
So what I am saying is "Please sir, I want some more" because everything you served is like a teaser and I need more, please!!

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I am never disappointed with your stories (why I saved yours for last actually). Once again, you crafted a stunning piece. Your interpretation of the prompt was so unique and moving. From your writing, I could see how you wanted to do a bit more. Which is basically a thing with competitions like this due to the time crunch.

I will certainly not object to more stories in this beautiful universe you created. I fact, I am kind of hoping for it since you left enough pieces free to start a little series! Even as a one-shot though, it was splendid.

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Thank you so much for reading, and for your vote!

From your writing, I could see how you wanted to do a bit more.

See, for me, that's the main challenge of the Olympics - I can usually come up with an idea that fits the prompt and theme, but it's getting it written in time that kills me! Because I have a real problem when it comes to length (i.e. I always write too much) so getting everything I need to across is sometimes difficult!

That said, I'm really glad you enjoyed this, and thank you so much for voting!

Haha, the time crunch really killed me in this one. As you could tell, there was so much more I wanted to write - I had an interesting few months with hospital visits and such, so it was a bit harder than I hoped to get the writing done.

I honestly don't know if I'll write more - tbh, I'm kind of disappointed with how it turned out overall, and your comment nails the reasons why. I'm glad people enjoyed it, and I had fun writing it, but I feel like I didn't live up to the potential I envisioned in my head ^^;;;

But thank you for reading, and for voting, and your enthusiasm!

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