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[Team AU] (Flying through the Clouds) Attention All Passengers
Prompt: Flying through the Clouds
Title: Attention All Passengers
Rating: PG
Warnings: Sexism, but that's about it
Author's Note: Last minute understudy to the rescue! I actually have written ficlets for all of the prompts under AU a while back for fun - plus they're all fem!KuroFai. That said, I'm glad I did, even though it's really short, it's better than nothing. This is set with the time era of the 60s and 70s in mind, when flight attendants (read: mostly women) were subjected to beauty standards and misogyny. Lastly, thanks to
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badluck_koi for input on that solo dialogue!Everyone says that Fai makes the perfect flight attendant. Tall, slender blue-eyed beauty with a pleasant courtesy smile for the passengers, she never disappoints her supervisor or the people she serves on the stressful flights. Yet she never envisioned that she would be subjected to so many leers from males or even groping.
The man she is serving at the present is smiling at her as she asks what he’d like to drink, but she knows by the looks of his eyes that he’s assessing her in her too-short and too-tight uniform. Her stomach twists in uneasiness. All she can do is keep smiling and pray he doesn’t try to touch her.
“Excuse me sir, but the attendants are not a la carte.”
Fai freezes, and the man splutters, turning bright red in anger. They swivel to see which of the attendants had just said that, and of course it is none other than Kurogane. Her beauty is different from the classic type Fai possesses, but nevertheless the attendant has an unusual steeliness to her, and it’s a wonder she has not been fired for her outspoken remarks yet.
In response, the man faces defeat and states his order, grinding his teeth. Relieved, Fai keeps on walking down the aisle, making sure to flash a smile at Kurogane in thanks. The other woman simply nods – and continues to discreetly give the man a scorn behind his back.
~the end.
Thank you for reading! How did I do?
Please score my fic according to these guidelines:
1. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? (1-10)
2. How In-Character was this fic? (1-10)
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
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In all seriousness, I can imagine Kurogane in that situation, watching Fai and the leers she gets, and slowly her blood boils until she snaps. I like the way it ended. She has her eyes on him, and he should be scared.
I adore the witty title you came up with BTW.
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Ahaha, she even has a daisy in her hair. Perfect!
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Excuse me sir, but the attendants are not a la carte Great line, you go Kuro-girl!
It's so short that it was hard to get a handle on the characterization. So it's a little difficult to score that but I'll try.
1. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? (1-10)
10
2. How In-Character was this fic? (1-10)
7
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
8
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Awww, glad to do so. All in all, it was very serendipitous that I had this at the ready. Alas, when I wrote this I didn't really have any other inspiration to expand on this; but who knows what will happen. I appreciate the honesty in the vote; by no means is the length sufficient to draw out more of their lovely characterization and dynamics.
Again, thank you for reading and voting on JUST ABOUT EVERY STORY.
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3. 9
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3 - 8
Sorta hard to get a solid feel for a fic when its as short, but this still amuses me. *waves a Zelinxia flag*
You deserve a medal of some sort at any rate.
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*is curious what a 'Xia' flag looks like*
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1. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 9
2. How In-Character was this fic? 8
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7
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Hee, I think her being badass while still staying rather classy is the best.
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I know I, for one, (ignoring how slow a writer I am) always crash and burn after writing a fic, and can't even write a drabble for maybe a week afterwards. That you got two out is such a short span is pretty impressive. Kudos!Scoring is a little harder with this length, at least for dragging out the characters, but as others have said, the dialogue's killer. And on-target; even the flight-attendant outfits today for women are still somewhat...ah, they draw attention to interesting points, as I witnessed last week. Good for them if they have a nice butt and want to show it off, but. Startling to see when you look up from picking up where you dropped a pen on the aircraft floor. ;;;
Do you know, on planes these days, that the rules imposed by the cabin crew are technically law? In the skies, fem!Kurogane is God. XD
1. 7
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3. 9
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And yes, I was pretty burnt out from whipping out the other Olympics story well into the weekend...then spurned out more words for a different story somehow @__@.Oh really? At least from the last few flights I've been on, female flight attendants are wearing pants (and not tight ones) and not-as-tight clothing. Definitely different from the tight, pencil-skirts of the past which these ladies here would be wearing.
Do you know, on planes these days, that the rules imposed by the cabin crew are technically law? In the skies, fem!Kurogane is God. XD
I'd worship fem!Kurogane ANY DAY! 8DDD
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Ahahahah, Kurogane in short flight attendant skirts makes me laugh, no matter what gender - dear god, have mercy on the soul of the poor mate that REALLY will try to touch Fai's butt!
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fem!Kurogane in pencil skirt: *_________________________*
male!Kurogane in pencil skirt: ........... (he'd best stick to a full full length dress >.>)
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(Anonymous) 2012-05-08 06:57 pm (UTC)(link)2. How In-Character was this fic? 8
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7
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Though I've got to admit I'm not a big fan of genderbending when it comes to KuroFai, this still made me curious about what could happen next. And that line:
“Excuse me sir, but the attendants are not a la carte.”
xDDDD was just awesome!! Also, embarassed Fai is always something fun, because he's usually the one who's making others embarassed.
1. How well did this fic fulfill the prompt? 10
2. How In-Character was this fic? 7
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 7
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Hmmm...I like writing cases where Fai gets embarrassed, but I wouldn't say she is in this tiny ficlet. Rather, she's uncomfortable, and I don't blame her oooone bit. >.>
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(Anonymous) 2012-05-10 01:38 pm (UTC)(link)2. How original was this fic? (9)
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (10)
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I like the idea though, the interaction is pretty IC, though I can't help but feel that Kurogane would have something to say to Fai for quietly enduring, too. Ideally Fai could have reflected the scorn with a blindingly polite smile, too. Hm... well whatever. ^^
1. 6 (clouds and sky were sort of missing? well... flying was there, but still...hm... dunno if I'm just really unfair?)
2. 9 (because there's just not enough to judge for a 10 xD)
3. 8 it was sweet <3
And actually.. I guess you'd have earned a free prompt of your choice for filling in twice, but I really don't write all that well and there are enough prompt posts open by far better writers.
I have pretty good cookies thoug... *offers*
And thus I conclude my voting marathon 20 minutes before midnight on the 11th. Damn, this is cutting it close... xD
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Hmm...the setting is in an airplane, so I think it constitutes flying through the clouds - it's not blatant and I'm not the type to spell out consistently "through the clouds" etc, so I can't really say I'm sorry for not making the setting so apparent? And yes, I can imagine Kurogane privately consulting Fai afterwards, in her unique way of saying "I wish you'd stand up for yourself too." But even despite her steeliness, she knows when to draw the line when being in public flight. She's badass...with class. <3
It'd be nice to have a prompt filled, but I'm not expecting anything of course. If so...my guilty pleasure wish is for a full genderbender fic (where both are female) or a kid fic. For now, I'll take your cookies.
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Well, for now you have the cookies and the extra special Strawberry milk, vanilla ice, whipped cream and chocolate sprinkles goodie I sort of mentioned in the compilation post. I made those yesterday and they were sort of a liquid orgy. *-*
About those prompts.. well, maybe...someone will step up. Maybe some amazing anon will do sth about it? uhm... it might take a while as I'm in the middle of the semester and everything has to be done now or never and...uhm... it's even better when you forgot about it and it comes out when you didn't even expect anything anymore...right? xD
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2. 9
3. 9
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