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kurofai2015-06-22 08:48 pm
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(Team Fantasy)[Apocalypse] Long and Lost
Title: Long and Lost
Prompt: [Apocalypse]
Rating: T
Warnings: Some violence, images of drowning
Notes: This is so long I am so sorry I didn't mean to write a novella it just happened I am so sorry.
Read on AO3: Long and Lost
Thank you for reading! How did I do?
Please score my fic according to these guidelines:
1. How well did this fic fit the prompt? (1-10)
2. How well written was the fic? (1-10)
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
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The feeling I got while reading this brought me back to when I first read The Hobbit, or Elantris, and a bunch of other fantasy books. I love how their world was ending by the blood of Gods in the form of Threads. It was so descriptive, I could paint such a pretty picture with all the ruins and the water, wew.
2. How well written was the fic? 10
So many feelings about this, I don't know where to begin. The story was amazing, and the storytelling was so immersive. I got hooked on to the premise, was awed by the world you painted, and fell in love with the story and legends. I kind of wish it was as long as the epics, but I feel like the pace was just right, so more's the shame.
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10
If I could give 11s, I would. Absolutely hooked on to the story from the get-go.
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2. How well written was the fic? 10/10
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10/10
I can say only a thing about this fic: majestic. I didn't read a thing like this in a very very very BIG amount of time, It reminds me about some books about Avalon I read years ago, It was... strange? No, not strange, it felt nostalgic. Everything is just too amazing ( even the seals, because I laughed so fucking hard thinking about Syaoran-seal I'm sorry ), the background, the way you tells all the story, the song-thing... I can keep talk about it for like, hours. My heart skipped a bit when that giant piece of ass stabbed Fay, i could feel tears in my eyes when Kurogane... sang.
Your work is the most beautiful pearl into the sea. ( and the water-apocalypse thing is aaaaaaaaaaah )
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Incredibly inventive and so wonderfully described and created.
2) 10/10
No errors and your writing style is a thing of beauty! Everything was described with such vivid detail and it truly was an amazing work of art.
3) 10/10
This was beautiful, creative, it flowed so well and I just loved everything about it.
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I loved the way the prompt was handled. There was so much thought put into the world-building and the descriptions were fantastic, full of details and easy to imagine. It was incredibly creative and such a different, interesting take on the apocalypse. Simply brilliant.
2. How well written was the fic? 10/10
Your writing style is beautiful. Kurogane's voice was captured effortlessly and every character was fleshed out and in character. Again, the descriptions were amazing. And the action scenes had me at the edge of my seat.
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10/10
100000/10 actually! This is exactly the type of AU I love to read, with just the right nods to canon but a fresh enough spin to it that still makes you wonder what's going to happen next and how things will turn out in the end.
I LOVED the way you subverted the "Good morning, Kurogane" because I had been waiting for it (and preparing myself for it, tbh) but in the end it was the sweetest moment and.... aaaaahhhh you're brilliant!
Extra kudos for getting Kurogane to sing, too.
And for including Fei Wang Reed. I don't remember ever reading a fic in which his characterization was as well-done as this.
Congratulations on a truly fantastic job :)
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scores
(Anonymous) 2015-06-30 01:43 am (UTC)(link)I thought this fic fitted the prompt nicely! A very classic 'villain wants to bring the end of the world' story
10
2. How well written was the fic? (1-10)
The pacing was great and unfolded perfectly. But there was some parts of the Interlude that still confuses me and the ending felt a bit abrupt and with the sudden inclusion of mokona.
8
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? (1-10)
I truly enjoyed your world building! What a greatly original story this was. The whole red threads in the ocean and the invented magics you created that specifically works in how you built this world. Truly inspired!
10
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Re: scores
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Well you certainly created an entirely unique way to fill the prompt. It was impressive that you managed to tie so much of the prompt through your world’s timeline. I would have liked to know a bit more about Fei Wang’s back story as you seemed to kind of gloss over how the world came to be in its current apocalyptic state (other than mentioning Fei Wang causing the Gods/Goddesses to fall with the roar of his beast). The way you wrote the story the vagueness did fit as the characters are more set on moving towards the future. However, I still feel having a bit more info thrown in about how/why Fei Wang rose up, how the Gods/Goddesses fell, and why their blood in the water is so harmful to living things, would help to embellish the prompt a bit more.
How well written was the fic? 10
You did a positively stunning job! Everything flowed wonderfully and was paced well (though Fei Wang’s end seemed rather abrupt). I loved how you were able to draw me right into the world that you created and how real all of the characters were. It was fun to follow along as Kurogane figured things out about Fai and how Fai related to his own past.
How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 9.5
My only real complaint is that the reader did not discover a bit more about how the world got into its apocalyptic state (the points I mentioned in the 1st section). Other than that, I loved the story! I was able to make discoveries and have revelations right along with Kurogane (something that has always been a big plus for me). I loved how you wrote in such a wonderfully descriptive fashion that not only did the world you created seem real but the characters did too. What I probably enjoyed most is how much depth you managed to give the characters. It really is a beautiful piece of work.
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The world shook, and Kurogane sang.
1. How well did this fic fit the prompt? 10/10
Holy hell, this was magnificent. The quakes, the rising deeps, the blood of the gods in the twisting Threads that turn the water red- the world sinking under the waves and the despair of knowing that soon the sea would take everything. This is a world ending, drowning, and you wrote it in magnificent style. This felt like reading an old legend, the kind of story you can find bound in cracked leather, the kind of story you sit and read on a dark night with a storm howling outside and rattling the windows, and I sat there and read this in one sitting with my jaw dropped open.
You knocked this one out of the ballpark, out of the damn stratosphere. This fic was absolutely apocalyptic in the best possible wat and I loved every second of it.
2. How well written was the fic? 10/10
Your words are haunting and bleak and starkly, strangely beautiful; I felt this story close over my head and pull me in deep without a ripple and I loved every second of it. I loved the foreshadowing; I cottoned onto the hinting that Fai was a selkie in about chapter five, I think, but I didn't expect the twists in that tale, and the chapter that recounted the life of his mother- oh, my heart. You nailed the character intepretations, and Fei Wang Reed was chilling. Also the bone-ship gave me literal chills, holy fuck. That thing was just... wrong. Brrr. Well done to you for painting such a visceral picture I had to wince in disgust at the sheer wrongness of it.
I loved how you made FWR an effective villain in this too, with a scheme as grand as the one he created in TRC itself. Also, I totally thought the lizard henchshadow thing was Rondart for most of the fic, just so you know.
3. How much did I enjoy this fic overall? 10/10
Fai closed his eye, breathing deeply of the ocean air.
“The people of Valeria forgot what the goddess told them, and that was why it began to fail at the end. That was never a song that was meant to be sung alone.”
He looked at Kurogane then and smiled, bright as the sun that shone down on him. Kurogane felt his breath catch and coughed to cover it.
I can't wax lyrical enough. I was amazed by this, and I'm so glad I read it. Thank you much for participating this year, and writing something so brilliant for the prompt.
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...It is now *adds to fic headcanon*
Anyway I'm glad you liked this so much! I kinda struggled with it a little but I'm really happy with how it turned out in the end :D
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I really, truly enjoyed this. It was fantastic ♥